1. Identify the minimal exposition you need the audience to know - Bob and Hope have been friends for 14 years.
2. Identify what Bob wants from Hope - He wants Hope to pretend to be his fiancee at his brother's wedding.
3. Ask yourself "How could Bob use this information as a weapon to manipulate Hope?" - Gilt.
Now, rewrite the dialogue.
BOB: What? You are telling me that after fourteen years of being your excuse to get out of whatever boring date or office party, or S.A.T. test that now you can't fib your way through a three-course meal?
HOPE: Fine! Alright. But no kissing.
Much better. Now your reader won't want to burn your script. =D
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