1. Identify the minimal exposition you need the audience to know - Bob and Hope have been friends for 14 years.
2. Identify what Bob wants from Hope - He wants Hope to pretend to be his fiancee at his brother's wedding.
3. Ask yourself "How could Bob use this information as a weapon to manipulate Hope?" - Gilt.
Now, rewrite the dialogue.
BOB: What? You are telling me that after fourteen years of being your excuse to get out of whatever boring date or office party, or S.A.T. test that now you can't fib your way through a three-course meal?
HOPE: Fine! Alright. But no kissing.
Much better. Now your reader won't want to burn your script. =D
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by Jessica Hinds
By Jessica Hinds
Logic is a wonderful tool that we humans sometimes choose to use, but Logic and Truth are two different things. When we confuse logic with truth....well...no bueno.
For example, I am a tall, lanky woman. Logic might lead you to think I do yoga and live a vegan lifestyle. Snooze. The truth is, I hate yoga and I eat meat almost every day, in fact, I grew up a bow hunter. Growing up, I rarely did anything "girly" like yoga because my stepfather wanted a son.
Logic often leads you to stereotype and cliche. Seeking out the truth leads to novelty and, most important, story.
I will write more about this in the fall but right now I just want you to practice differentiating between using logic (to build one possible option) vs seeking out truth (to discover the story.)
Remember, we are not logical or rational beings automatically. Logic and reason are tools we are capable of using but our nature is rooted in the emotional. So if you are writing a screenplay, focusing on the logic or the reason of the plot and the character will not lead you to the Truth the way that following the emotional journey will.
Stay tuned for more on the neuroscience behind human (and therefore character) behavior and how it can help you in your life and your characters in their story.
The Crass Shaman
Guess what -- you need to get selfish.
That's right. You need to throw everything down and commit to only doing what you want to do when you want to do it - fuck everyone else.
Five years ago, filled with anxiety, depression, self loathing I decided to do this, and you know what I discovered? The moment I decided I would only do things I wanted to do...I started doing a lot of awesome new stuff. But more importantly I did a lot of the same stuff. Only this time I didn't have that drag of obligation, there was no resentment. Most importantly I realized I really actually am a very selfless person by nature...when I allow myself to be selfish.
In fact the first thing I did was start teaching for free and outline a scholarship for artists from my hometown.
That's how I got rid of that nagging "you're so selfish" voice that would ruminate round my head fifty times a day.
Most people are not selfish, we become that way (and miserable and cold) when our reasons for doing things come from obligation rather than true desire.
So go forth - Be Selfish - only do what you want -- and see who you really are.
NOTE: If you are a psychopath, please disregard this blog post. Please do contact me as I would like to ask you many questions. No judgment - just curiosity.
NOTE NOTE: If you do this and discover you truly are a selfish dick....good. At least now you know and if you want to you can do something about it.
The Crass Shaman
Know yourself - don't define yourself.
The Creativity Shaman
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